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Post by Angus Mcloud on Sept 23, 2008 15:12:10 GMT -5
So me and my friends shoot short films and we have fun doing so. Recently we have been doing some comedy shorts. If you could take a look and give us some feedback that would be great. BTW i know the text is super small and we're trying to fix it.
Popcorn:
5 Stages of Grief
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Post by teamjd on Sept 23, 2008 15:35:27 GMT -5
I have watched the first one only thus far. First, that music is awesome. I enjoyed it, but damn was that random. The only laugh out loud moment was the laugh track, because it came out of nowhere. If I was going to offer advice, I'd say try opening the microwave a little more extreme, basically ripping it open would match the tone on the skit. And the editing seemed a bit shaky a points. Only other thing is that a few bits needed to be tightened up. When you're friend bursts in, he mugs for a few seconds too long, to the point where it isn't funny anymore. I also think the fridge/hand gag could have been a little crisper, but overall I'm not upset with spending three minutes of my life on that. I'll get to the next one eventually. ;D
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Post by Angus Mcloud on Sept 25, 2008 11:22:45 GMT -5
Thanks for the feedback. Im happy it was at least a little funny
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Post by Alucard on Sept 25, 2008 11:34:14 GMT -5
I loved the popcorn one. Especially the laugh track, it was milked a little too long though.
Also I mark for Marty.
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Post by Joe Neglia on Sept 25, 2008 13:19:57 GMT -5
I think you've got potential here. It's still rough, but that is something that is fixed over time with experience and trial-and-error. A good bit of your editing (a very important part that often gets overlooked) is very smooth, while some is a bit jarring (I'd avoid cutting to a slightly different shot/angle on the same scene - if you have to cut, go with an entirely different angle or length-of-shot (close-up, mid, long-shot)).
Keep at it, bro.
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Post by Just Jay on Sept 25, 2008 13:38:00 GMT -5
Coronation Starscream? This is bad comedy!
Nah, I'm just kidding. I just wanted to say that line. I'll check these videos out when I'm not in a library.
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Post by Angus Mcloud on Sept 25, 2008 14:34:50 GMT -5
BTW its me as the main character in the second video.
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Post by Brandon Walsh is Insane. on Sept 25, 2008 16:24:09 GMT -5
How cool.
So when you make it big and win awards, will you mention the WC Forums at the podium?
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Post by Angus Mcloud on Sept 25, 2008 16:32:55 GMT -5
How cool. So when you make it big and win awards, will you mention the WC Forums at the podium? Well you guys are our first unbiased critics |
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